With 7 days left to go, why not try to get another set of eyes on this? English teacher on summer break here. I've got time to read if you'd like to swap. Or if you're really desperate, I can just read and critique for few days. I promise not to use a red pen 😛
2012 Q4: R
2016 Q3: SHM
2019 Q2: HM, Q3: HM
2020 Q2: HM, Q4: SHM
2021 Q1: HM, Q2: SF, Q3: SHM, Q4: SHM
2022 Q1: SHM, Q2 RWC, Q4 RWC
2023 Q1: RWC Q2: SHM Q3:Nope Q4: WIP
I can look at 2k quickly for ya.
I don't have anything to swap per se. Unless you want to have a look at my WiP, which is heavy on the iP. 
Career: 1x Win -- 2x NW-F -- 2x S-F -- 9x S-HM -- 11x HM -- 7x R
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@tj_knight I sent it over. Thank you.
2012 Q4: R
2016 Q3: SHM
2019 Q2: HM, Q3: HM
2020 Q2: HM, Q4: SHM
2021 Q1: HM, Q2: SF, Q3: SHM, Q4: SHM
2022 Q1: SHM, Q2 RWC, Q4 RWC
2023 Q1: RWC Q2: SHM Q3:Nope Q4: WIP
@tj_knight If you need a set of eyes on a WiP I can look at it and/or swap my 2k-ish WiP. PM me
Todd S. Jones
"Whether you think you can, or you think you can't--you're right."~ Henry Ford
Writers of the Future:
2026 V43: HM, HM (HM Resubmit), Submitted, Drafting new story
2025 V42: RWC, HM (HM Resubmit), HM, SHM
2024 V41: RWC (HM Resubmit), HM, RWC, Finalist (RWC Resubmit)
2023 V40: HM, HM, R, HM
2022 V39: SHM, HM, Semi-finalist, HM (HM Resubmit)
2021 V38: -, -, -, HM
2020 V37: -, R, -, -
Other Achievements:
2026:
- On The Premises #46 short story contest: HM (Published in HTML)
- Southeastern Writers Association: 1st place in Ron Ferrell Memory Museum Award and 3rd place in The Lighthouse Prompt
2025: Southeastern Writers Association: 1st place in Crime Fiction and 3rd place in The Lighthouse Prompt
@babooher after you get feedback and make updates, if you need another set of eyes on it PM me.
Todd S. Jones
"Whether you think you can, or you think you can't--you're right."~ Henry Ford
Writers of the Future:
2026 V43: HM, HM (HM Resubmit), Submitted, Drafting new story
2025 V42: RWC, HM (HM Resubmit), HM, SHM
2024 V41: RWC (HM Resubmit), HM, RWC, Finalist (RWC Resubmit)
2023 V40: HM, HM, R, HM
2022 V39: SHM, HM, Semi-finalist, HM (HM Resubmit)
2021 V38: -, -, -, HM
2020 V37: -, R, -, -
Other Achievements:
2026:
- On The Premises #46 short story contest: HM (Published in HTML)
- Southeastern Writers Association: 1st place in Ron Ferrell Memory Museum Award and 3rd place in The Lighthouse Prompt
2025: Southeastern Writers Association: 1st place in Crime Fiction and 3rd place in The Lighthouse Prompt
@toddsjones Thank you, but I think it's time to call this one. I can still read if you'd like me to.
2012 Q4: R
2016 Q3: SHM
2019 Q2: HM, Q3: HM
2020 Q2: HM, Q4: SHM
2021 Q1: HM, Q2: SF, Q3: SHM, Q4: SHM
2022 Q1: SHM, Q2 RWC, Q4 RWC
2023 Q1: RWC Q2: SHM Q3:Nope Q4: WIP
Thank you for response. This one is for next Q of WotF, so I'm okay for now. Need to finish it and then get a reader.
Todd S. Jones
"Whether you think you can, or you think you can't--you're right."~ Henry Ford
Writers of the Future:
2026 V43: HM, HM (HM Resubmit), Submitted, Drafting new story
2025 V42: RWC, HM (HM Resubmit), HM, SHM
2024 V41: RWC (HM Resubmit), HM, RWC, Finalist (RWC Resubmit)
2023 V40: HM, HM, R, HM
2022 V39: SHM, HM, Semi-finalist, HM (HM Resubmit)
2021 V38: -, -, -, HM
2020 V37: -, R, -, -
Other Achievements:
2026:
- On The Premises #46 short story contest: HM (Published in HTML)
- Southeastern Writers Association: 1st place in Ron Ferrell Memory Museum Award and 3rd place in The Lighthouse Prompt
2025: Southeastern Writers Association: 1st place in Crime Fiction and 3rd place in The Lighthouse Prompt