critique

I'd be happy to give it a once-over, drop me a PM if you'd like me to give it a look.

Posted by: @bzelger

Hi,

Hoping someone more experienced would be willing to take a look at my Q1 effort, ~10K words. Will of course return the favor with my own limited wisdom if desired.

Thanks.

Remember when I told you this, new member @bzelger? "Do take advantage of the critique swap folder. Many here have scored highly in the Contest, have won it, and/or have been published in respectable magazines and anthologies. They too can show you the way."

And now Dr Jest fulfilled my prophecy! He's a valued member of this Forum, a Super Secrets' alumni, a Finalist in WotF, and pro-published at Podcastle! Listen close to his commentary, and may the Force be with you on your next story! (And thanks for helping him, Rob!)

Cheers!

Wulf Moon
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Yes, I have already received some valuable -- and challenging -- feedback.

Posted by: @bzelger

Yes, I have already received some valuable -- and challenging -- feedback.

Challenging for sure--I thought very hard about a couple of those suggestions, because I knew that they wouldn't be easy to follow through on. But remember that you can ignore my feedback, or disagree with me. Don't feel compelled to make every change I suggest, just because I suggested it! If you feel that the change I'm suggesting is going to damage the story you want to tell, then listen to your instincts--but I'm also happy to go into further detail and elaborate on any point I made, or anything else that you'd like to ask about.

Sent you a PM!