Anyone up for a very quick crit for a story 11,000 to 15,000 words?
Mostly looking for bad commas and other nitpicks. Obviously since it's by me so the writing isn't prefect or close to prefect, but I don't have time for a complete revising so I will take my chances with it as is. Unless some sentence doesn't make sense that is.
I can of course do one back, even though not sure about grammar and such.
Working on turning Lead into Gold.
Four HMs From WotF
The latest was Q1'12
HM-quarter 4 Volume 32
One HM for another contest
published in Strange New Worlds Ten.
Another HM http://onthepremises.com/minis/mini_18.html
I could do with an emergency crit as well. 
I sent you an email!
2 x SHM
1 x HM
2 x R
I could do with an emergency crit as well.
Got it and responded.
Working on turning Lead into Gold.
Four HMs From WotF
The latest was Q1'12
HM-quarter 4 Volume 32
One HM for another contest
published in Strange New Worlds Ten.
Another HM http://onthepremises.com/minis/mini_18.html
