I received a very valid critique that my story is severely lacking in its opening and I've reworked it to hopefully be more compelling. If anyone would mind taking a look, I'd be happy to offer a critique in exchange, though I'm still quite inexperienced, so keep that in mind! 
I'm tight on time, but can take a look at your opening if you like--just throw me a PM.
DQ:0 / R:0 / RWC:1 / HM:15 / SHM:7 / SF:1 / F:1
Published prior WotF entries: PodCastle, HFQ, Abyss & Apex
Pending: Q2.V42
@twdad, I'll take a gander if you PM it to me. Don't mind on format, so long as it's not an Apple-only thing (if that exists?). I'll at least take a look at the opening, and if it's not crazy long I'll probably check it all out.
VOL 40 2nd Quarter: Third Place ("Ashes to Ashes, Blood to Carbonfiber")
Past submissions: R - HM - HM - HM - HM - HM - SHM - SHM
www.jd-writes.com
Kindle Vella - Ashes to Ashes, Earth to Kaybee
Sent you a PM!
v37: Q3HM
v38: Q1R, Q2HM, Q3HM
v39: Q2HM, Q3HM, Q4HM
v40: Q1 In Progress
I'm available for critique exchanges via PM. Note: I will not be available for exchanges from 12/17/22-1/1/23.
